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I've been drawing so much smut lately. Mostly yuri, much to Arkillian's disappointment. She asked me to draw her something. So I told her to name me two characters I could slash.

So she did.

Alex and Bryan. <.<

Yes I know that they are father and son in her story, but this is different, I swear. She tells me that those two are the only charries that she has that can be slashed on account of the fact that it's a parelle universe or something.

>.>

So yeah. I suck at drawing, so please tell me how to fix this if you think it needs to be fixed.

Cheers.

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Submitted by: Mythra

Posted: Mar 16, 2007 3:23 am

Completed: Mar 17, 2007

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Galleries: Original Art, Shounen-Ai, Sketchbook

Keywords: alex and bryan, make this last forever

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arkillian

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Mar 16, 2007 7:03 am

Hey- it's alot better than you poke a stick at it for. IT has issues sure, but the poses is what makes a yaoi/yuri- not as much the detail. I think you did well. Its very cosy looking :blush:

Alright- let me explain it. Since Bryan gets torn out of time and has no past, I don't consider him anymore related to Alex than by blood, thus, this is about the only non creepy coupling for yaoi to me O.o Any other coupling is either incest, or freaky.

Attaching a red pen crit- You need to watch their backs. The red line I did is trying to follow your art style, giving them the shape, but not so much the broadness I give them. Watch your shoulders too- as far back as they can extend, they can't go past the shoulder blade even when pinned back. The thumb on Alex's hand was a little stubby- needs a little fleashy area [emoticon] Profiles though- the easiest way is to draw a line and use that to draw off. The eyes are about 1/2 way down, the nose is 2/5 of that. The mouth is the next 5th, and the last two 5ths are bottom lip and chin. The ear is as long as the nose is.

Well... I roasted it I guess ^^; LOL! Hope it helps [emoticon]

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Mythra (Reply)

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Mar 16, 2007 12:34 pm

Omgs.

Thank you darling. I will redraw it over, or at least try to fix it.

Thank you for helping me out on my art and stuff. I appreciate it a lot.

And I tried to make it look like they were cosy and stuff and not all... well, you know. <.<

*hugs*

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