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Page for my comic Final Sunset
This page and the next page have been a long time waiting, as I needed to rewrite the scripts cause well- the body of the story was great, but the ending was really blase'... I wanted to end on something a bit better.
So these are nearly finished pencils. I'm gonna put this on roast me, cause I want to know if these pages are aesthetically layed out. I'm not worried if the people have acurate proprtions or anything. Let me know your thoughts on the page at a distance, and I'd be sooooo greatfull ^^
As this comic is due for relese soon though, I can't take advanced crit after February 2008.It'll be *too late* by then ^^;
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Submitted by: arkillian
Posted: Feb 9, 2008 9:00 pm
Completed: unknown
Critiques (7)Galleries: Action, Adventure, Bishounen, Fantasy, Original Art, Sketchbook
Keywords: bryan dragon blaze desmond high king firedore map palace, final sunset pencils page 34
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 cruffinsTotal Posts: 564Feb 11, 2008 2:44 pmThe little boy in the second to last panel needs to be a bit chunkier. kids get baby fat that stays for awhile, he might look more like a child if you fattened him up a bit. His height is perfect though. it makes him seem about 8-10 years old. --- I'm not streaking, I'm just too sexah for clothes to handle! |
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 arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2930Feb 11, 2008 2:58 pmHe should be more like 5 years old. Theoretically, he was born a year ago, but Dragons age weirdly. I'll see what I can do- thanks for pointing that out ^^ --- |
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cruffins (Reply)Total Posts: 564Feb 11, 2008 3:08 pmno problem. if you need some examples, just ask. I'm more than happy to help. --- I'm not streaking, I'm just too sexah for clothes to handle! |
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arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2930Feb 11, 2008 3:21 pmNo no... It's fine ^^ I sometimes forget. I've given people 6 fingers, and made 13 hour clocks. Sometimes you get caught p making them smaller and forget to make them look childish ^^; It's how it is --- |
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cruffins (Reply)Total Posts: 564Feb 11, 2008 3:29 pmI've done the wrong hand sword thing too. usually my stuff gets drawn out about twice before I do the final bout, and my sweet bff crits it for me. I'm gonna have to find a new crit soon kuz we're headed to different colleges. --- I'm not streaking, I'm just too sexah for clothes to handle! |
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arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2930Feb 11, 2008 3:39 pmIt's difficult though... http://www.paperdemon.com/comic/page/5/3.html Spot the freak with the 6 fingers!! It bugged me WAY after it was printed, the freak pic. IT bypassed me, my writers, my letter/editor, AND my colourist. I happened to look at it and go "There's something not quite right..." There it is- printed in friggin black and white too T.T It's *so* sad... --- |
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cruffins (Reply)Total Posts: 564Feb 11, 2008 3:42 pmyou just get caught up with something else that needs your attention. it happens to the best of us. --- I'm not streaking, I'm just too sexah for clothes to handle! |
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