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This is older than aged brie, but i still like the movement in ths picture, however extremely unfinished it may be.
So, rip it to peices, and I'll keep them in mind for future ref ![[emoticon]](http://www.paperdemon.com/images/forum/mysmilies/15pxyellow_smile.gif)
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Submitted by: DMoontear
Posted: Feb 29, 2008 10:37 pm
Completed: unknown
Critiques (9)Galleries: General, Original Art, Sketchbook
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 pazazzTotal Posts: 378Mar 1, 2008 5:38 pmIt is hard to judge where you wanted to go with this as it is unfinished, but there does appear to be some proportional issues that don't work for me here. Her facial features are off, her nose too long, her forehead too short. The torso too, has some issues. The space from her neck to her breasts seems short, her shoulders a little too round, but I think it could also be the way her hair is lying on them. I hope you will continue to work on this piece, as I would love to see her done. Thanks for sharing this with us. |
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DMoontear (Reply)Total Posts: 21Mar 2, 2008 8:12 pmHer shoulders were supposed to be scrunched up,and partially covered by hair. But her face is what made this a phaeled project - mostly for the reasons you have stated. |
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 arkillianTotal Posts: 2806Mar 2, 2008 3:51 pmAs Pazazz said- I think that having highlights on the outfit would assist alot, even if it's a minor sheen. Not sure if you intended to do that. I like the top though ^^ Very gothic looking. I reckon if you gave it some seem highlights and stuff this'll be totally wicked ^^ --- |
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DMoontear (Reply)Total Posts: 21Mar 2, 2008 8:10 pmIt was supposed to have highlights but the markers bled into them, and then I was going to shop them in, but then I didn't |
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arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2806Mar 2, 2008 11:37 pmOh noes!! OnO Copic marker type pens? If you use zeta paper for them, they don't bleed ^^ Or a white pen on top --- |
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DMoontear (Reply)Total Posts: 21 |
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arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2806Mar 4, 2008 11:35 amOhhhh... not good. You're better to go with a cheep indian ink than shapies. In half a year's time, that picture will taint the colour of anything touching it- I had huge issues with sharpies on clear leaf folders- tainting the sleeves. They great for looking through art, but when you change the page, its tainted yellow over the sharpie area. IF you want to stop the bleeding however, if you leave a thick black line, that'll stop the ink bleeding cause it's already bled. It's still WAY better to ink it though :< Even cheep ink in alot nicer finish, and will last alot longer. Sharpies ARE very convenient though ^^ --- |
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DMoontear (Reply)Total Posts: 21Mar 4, 2008 7:00 pmYeah, I've learned my lesson |
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 blackwingedangelTotal Posts: 190Apr 23, 2008 10:31 pmI like the movement in the pic and I think its a nice touch that only her laces are red and everything else is black/white. |
