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This is a work-in-progress for... well i guess you could call it a concept illustration for Surviving Together. I'm trying to get myself back into the project.
I need some help with this. I'm having a lot of trouble with Zarbon's arms. He's holding her but im not sure if it looks like he's actually holding her. The pose in the hands doesn't seem convincing to me. Also that right boot doesn't look convincing either.
If you know how to fix this, feel free to draw ontop of it and send the corrected one to me. please draw it in another color so i can see it.
All comments appreciated.
Submitted by: BogusRed
Posted: May 14, 2006 1:15 am
Completed: May 14, 2006
Galleries: Dragon Ball Z, General, Work In Progress
Keywords: dragon ball z, surviving together, zarbon, bulma, zarbon and bulma wip
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arkillianTotal Posts: 2930May 14, 2006 3:26 amThe right leg is too short- that's the problem. Either that, or he is totally off balance. There's a bit of a size difference with Bulma and Zarb. Is this right? --- |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 14, 2006 10:23 amyeah the arms could be beefier. thanks for the comments. --- |
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arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2930May 14, 2006 5:19 pm.... dutch angle? Never heard of that... ^^; --- |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 14, 2006 7:03 pma dutch angle is when the camera is tilted a little bit so that the horizon line is on a slant. --- |
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arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2930May 14, 2006 8:28 pmOK- that makes sence. He isn't balanced. All of his weight is on his left foot cause his torso is completly above it. The right leg should either be tippe toed, or closer to the other foot. Either that, or you need to kick out his left leg more. That's how I see it --- |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 14, 2006 11:23 pmhe's balanced. his weight is evenly on both legs. but the horizon is slanted for drama. but i'll tip him more to one side and draw in a horizon line to make the dutch angle more noticable. trust me it will make more sense when you see the next revision --- |
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arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2930 |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 15, 2006 8:37 amoh ok i see what you're saying! i want his back to be arched a little bit but perhaps i need to follow that line there that you just put down. i'll work with that. thank you --- |
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arkillian (Reply)Total Posts: 2930May 15, 2006 3:18 pmThanks --- |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 15, 2006 8:43 amyeah looking at it again. the shoulders should probably match the same angle as the feet. you're right. --- |
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OkamiTotal Posts: 415May 14, 2006 4:25 amIt is true that Zarbon seems to be much taller compared to Bulma, but I suppose that the difference in size is due to the difference of age and to the fact that Zarbon is an alien. |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 14, 2006 10:25 amthank you for the comments Okami. For the left leg do you mean his left or screen left (left from our perspective)? --- |
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Okami (Reply)Total Posts: 415May 14, 2006 11:01 amyou are welcome! I was talking about the left leg on the side of Bulma's head, his real left side. |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 14, 2006 11:24 amoh ok. thank you for clarifying. --- |
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WildeKardeTotal Posts: 187May 14, 2006 4:36 amOK this is what I see. WHy it looks wrong. He is leaning to one side,which seems to be because of her weight. But her legs should not be the heavier side of her. With his arm positioned how it is, it seens she is slipping down. She should come up a little more on his arm. Or move his arm more under her.Also, he looks in motion in his uper body and his legs look stiff, Perhaps a slight bend to his knees would make him look like he is braceing her wait. Then again I'm sick and its 4:35 am. --- Procrastinate Later! words to live by. |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 14, 2006 10:27 amthanks for the comments WildeKarde. I'll move her body up a little more to see if i can fix that balance problem. she does look like she's slipping. --- |
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Mallie3Total Posts: 1450May 14, 2006 8:29 pmok...I am really liking how you want this to look. Yes you want some comments and critiques...alright..yes...the lover body seems a little off from the upper body...I am liking the upper body from how I am looking at it now...it is just you do kinda have him on a slant and he looks like he is tipping or something...ok maybe he is a little drunk?! lol no. I am loving the way Bulma is resting in his arms I am loving that...As Arkillian said he needs a little re shaping or the legs as in height and ...he needs to be straight other than those details it is looking awesome I can't wait to see more@ ---
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 14, 2006 11:21 pmok thanks for the comments --- |
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LilimayhemTotal Posts: 1420May 17, 2006 7:26 pmIm not good at pointing out whats wrong, except if it jump at my eyes, is his head a bit too big? Me, i think all drawings are ok and that there is no such thing as something wrong with a drawing. But also, i'm sure you already had all the help you needed so i'm just going to rant and rave. --- Dont take life too seriously, you're gonna die anyway... |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 17, 2006 10:26 pmthank you for the comments Lili --- |
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May 18, 2006 3:27 pmGorgeous, I love Zarbon's expression. And this has to be the first ZarbonxBulma fanart I've ever seen! I'm really not much of an artist myself, so I'm afraid I can't help you. But really, it looks perfect to me! ^_^ |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 18, 2006 6:05 pmthanks Starkiller. It's more like Zarbon is getting ready to claim her as a concubine. She doesn't really want to have anything to do with it. Then Vegeta stops him and claims Bulma for himself. --- |
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Neko-girlTotal Posts: 428May 21, 2006 12:16 pmI think his arm should be a bit more under her back then nare her neck apart fomr then it's cool --- The only time your in my dreams is when I'm killing you |
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BogusRed (Reply)Total Posts: 2837May 22, 2006 11:53 amthanks for the feedback Annieo. --- |
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Neko-girl (Reply)Total Posts: 428May 22, 2006 12:23 pmYa welcome BR just keep up the good work --- The only time your in my dreams is when I'm killing you |