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Cokekitty

Total Posts: 2618

Apr 9, 2008 5:10 am

This is a touching piece. The story excerpt is a good addition, too.

Mmm, I think it needs a background. To add to the mood. [emoticon] It's still very good on its own, though.

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[emoticon] . . . . Formally the Dollmaker. . . . . . . [emoticon]

RaeMae  (Reply)

Total Posts: 178

Apr 9, 2008 2:07 pm

Thank you so much.

I wanted to add a background, I just wasn't sure what. lol. A table and chair is what would be behind them in the story, but I didn't know if that would take away or not. *shrug*

Thanks again. [emoticon]

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GOD SAVE THE QUEEN

Cokekitty  (Reply)

Total Posts: 2618

Apr 11, 2008 6:02 pm

It's worth a shot, yah?

Well, I like it either way. [emoticon] You're welcome. [emoticon]

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[emoticon] . . . . Formally the Dollmaker. . . . . . . [emoticon]


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