Critiques for "Eyes of Darkness"

A few thoughts- She has uneasyness and depressed and stuff, right? Why is she like this? That needs to be promenant, and obvious to figure out, unless she isn't sure herself. At the moment, there is 3 ideas on the page, and none is dominent enought to be the subject. I mean, her head is large enough to be the subject, but she's sad and gaunt, and we don't know why. If she needs to be freaked out, then I suggest a freaked out look, and her looking at what she's freaked out at- establising a relationship. if this boy is related, then he should be more obvious. Using the elements you have here, I'd give the pic a spinning feel, with her clamped up in a ball, and the boy in the background darkened or something. If that made sence. I hope it helps

Actually you know, I was struggling with making the main idea just ONE idea. Originally it was just supposed to be me putting this idea I had as I read the book on paper, but soon I wanted to make it something, so I just put down all the ideas. Sp I guess all this confusion is actually just my fault at actually paying attention to what I was doing. I think I might do this one again and try to incorporate what you told me here. It really helped, and after a few reads, it DID in fact make sense!!

Yeah, the thing with pictures is to make it clear what the focus is, and why its the focus. Anything from a picture of a scruffy dog, to a few african kids playing with some toys, to an intense emotion of unease. If she is ment to feel unease, then someone that looks at the picture needs to be able to see the story of why for them to feel connected. Stalkers in the BG is good- they're freaky. You need to connect that to her

Oooooo Ok I think I have an idea of how to fix this now. WOO! Thanks!!