Critiques for "Zarbon and Bulma WIP"

The right leg is too short- that's the problem. Either that, or he is totally off balance. There's a bit of a size difference with Bulma and Zarb. Is this right?

Um... His right elbow could be wider too. It seems a little small for a warrior of the DBZverse... Errr... If this is all crap, then I'm stilly drunk atthe moment ^^;

yeah the arms could be beefier. thanks for the comments.

he's on a dutch angle by the way.

.... dutch angle? Never heard of that... ^^;

*Has never taken art classes*

a dutch angle is when the camera is tilted a little bit so that the horizon line is on a slant.

OK- that makes sence. He isn't balanced. All of his weight is on his left foot cause his torso is completly above it. The right leg should either be tippe toed, or closer to the other foot. Either that, or you need to kick out his left leg more. That's how I see it

he's balanced. his weight is evenly on both legs. but the horizon is slanted for drama. but i'll tip him more to one side and draw in a horizon line to make the dutch angle more noticable. trust me it will make more sense when you see the next revision

I don't know if this is clear, but this is what I'm meaning- if you line up the angle on his head to his body, his right leg looks out. If I'm wrong, then do tell me why ^^;

oh ok i see what you're saying! i want his back to be arched a little bit but perhaps i need to follow that line there that you just put down. i'll work with that. thank you

Thanks I didn't think I was going too crazy ^^; It was a bit difficult though, cause knowing how you know art, that may have actually been the pose- I just wanted to make sure that you understood my basis of the critique I'm glad I could help ^^

yeah looking at it again. the shoulders should probably match the same angle as the feet. you're right.

by the way, sorry the image folio thingy wasn't displaying properly before. there was a problem with my code. i fixed it.

It is true that Zarbon seems to be much taller compared to Bulma, but I suppose that the difference in size is due to the difference of age and to the fact that Zarbon is an alien.

The left leg of Zarbon is slightly deviated but I do not see defects in the way he holds Bulma in his arms and their faces are well drawn.

In conclusion, I would say that the only defect would be his left leg, besides that, the draft is realistic and well done.

thank you for the comments Okami. For the left leg do you mean his left or screen left (left from our perspective)?

you are welcome! I was talking about the left leg on the side of Bulma's head, his real left side.

oh ok. thank you for clarifying.

OK this is what I see. WHy it looks wrong. He is leaning to one side,which seems to be because of her weight. But her legs should not be the heavier side of her. With his arm positioned how it is, it seens she is slipping down. She should come up a little more on his arm. Or move his arm more under her.Also, he looks in motion in his uper body and his legs look stiff, Perhaps a slight bend to his knees would make him look like he is braceing her wait. Then again I'm sick and its 4:35 am.

thanks for the comments WildeKarde. I'll move her body up a little more to see if i can fix that balance problem. she does look like she's slipping.

ok...I am really liking how you want this to look. Yes you want some comments and critiques...alright..yes...the lover body seems a little off from the upper body...I am liking the upper body from how I am looking at it now...it is just you do kinda have him on a slant and he looks like he is tipping or something...ok maybe he is a little drunk?! lol no. I am loving the way Bulma is resting in his arms I am loving that...As Arkillian said he needs a little re shaping or the legs as in height and ...he needs to be straight other than those details it is looking awesome I can't wait to see more@

ok thanks for the comments

Im not good at pointing out whats wrong, except if it jump at my eyes, is his head a bit too big? Me, i think all drawings are ok and that there is no such thing as something wrong with a drawing. But also, i'm sure you already had all the help you needed so i'm just going to rant and rave.
I love it. God, ever since i've read this fanfic and that i know your working on it...i've been dying to see more and more of your project. I wish i could help you with it. Cant wait to see the finish work. Love it Susie!!!!

thank you for the comments Lili

Gorgeous, I love Zarbon's expression. And this has to be the first ZarbonxBulma fanart I've ever seen! I'm really not much of an artist myself, so I'm afraid I can't help you. But really, it looks perfect to me! ^_^

thanks Starkiller. It's more like Zarbon is getting ready to claim her as a concubine. She doesn't really want to have anything to do with it. Then Vegeta stops him and claims Bulma for himself.

I think his arm should be a bit more under her back then nare her neck apart fomr then it's cool

thanks for the feedback Annieo.

Ya welcome BR just keep up the good work