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Help!! need a poem!!
Posted: Dec 27, 2005 4:59 pm
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OK- I truely suck at poems- my attempt at writing poems in the past have failed, and it's no differnt from today. Could someoe write a simple poem that I could use in my story I'm writing- its a short love story, where this girl is writing a poem for class about her meeting her 'Knight in shinning armour' in her dreams, and how its all rosy and golden, then she wakes up and realises its all a dream. The wring for this is easy for me, bu the poem? Errrr > ![[emoticon]](http://www.paperdemon.com/images/forum/mysmilies/15pxyellow_sad.gif)
I really suck at poetry.
Any takers for giving it a go? Anything is cool as long as it's beter than my crap!! XD
I really suck at poetry. Any takers for giving it a go? Anything is cool as long as it's beter than my crap!! XD
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Posted: Dec 27, 2005 8:35 pm
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Well I think I can help you, I will just write the poem as I see it from what you put and then PM it to you, if you like. That way you can tell me if it works with what you want. ![[emoticon]](http://www.paperdemon.com/images/forum/mysmilies/15pxyellow_smile.gif)
I hope I can help.
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Posted: Dec 27, 2005 9:26 pm
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Ohhhh- that would be really good ^^ I'm only doing the 1 draft of the short story (errr... short by my standards ^^ ![[emoticon]](http://www.paperdemon.com/images/forum/mysmilies/15pxyellow_wink.gif)
but hopefully it'll be good :3 Thank you!! *huggles*
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Posted: Dec 31, 2005 9:24 pm
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An extra bit on the poem- I've finished the story, but it ended up being a little lemony, which I wasn't aimimg for, but you can read the story to make it easier- http://www.paperdemon.com/rc_storyview.php/id/907.html
Please, if you would like to make a poem for this, the story does have explict description in it.
Please give it a go- I'd like to finalise the story
Please, if you would like to make a poem for this, the story does have explict description in it.
Please give it a go- I'd like to finalise the story
Last edited by arkillian on Dec 31, 2005 9:31 pm. Total edits: 3.
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Posted: Jan 1, 2006 4:49 pm
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I read your story (there's a comment there) and spat out a poem for you. You can find it here. Feel free to use it, discard it, or tear it to pieces to make it better.
Last edited by SaikonoYume on Jan 1, 2006 4:50 pm. Total edits: 1.
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Sora kara ochitekuru no wa are wa ame de wa nakute
Sora kara ochitekuru no wa are wa ame de wa nakute
That which fell from the sky was not rain
Posted: Jan 1, 2006 6:39 pm
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Brilliant ^^ I was hopeing for a little interest- sure, its usable As I said- I'm terrible at poetry, so anything is beter than my attempts ^^; Unfortunatly, romanc is something I find hard to do even with story writing. I'm an action chick
As I said- I'm terrible at poetry, so anything is beter than my attempts ^^; Unfortunatly, romanc is something I find hard to do even with story writing. I'm an action chick ---
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Posted: Jan 7, 2006 12:35 pm
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I could try. It should be easier since you have that URL up there. Sounds like a fun challenge ^-^
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Posted: Jan 7, 2006 3:24 pm
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*beg beg beg* This story is going to be infinetly weird to post without one!! The problem is that it really requires two poems- This is, one poem before, and an augmented version of the first as the 'improved' version ^^
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Posted: Jan 7, 2006 11:01 pm
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Hmmm... I will give it a go. No promises, though. I'm not much into romance, either; I'm a comedian. ^ ^ At least, that's what I keep telling myself... [i]you're funny, Nicole, you're funny, you're funny...
I'll post again when I've finished.
I'll post again when I've finished.
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So, Ghandi used to walk around barefoot, and his feet got really tough. He fasted a lot and got extremely skinny and weak, and his odd diet gave him a bad breath. This makes him a super-calloused, fragile mystic, hexed with halitosis.
Posted: Jan 8, 2006 12:01 am
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Thanks ^^ :Huggles:
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Posted: Jan 18, 2006 3:51 pm
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I just wanted to wish u the best of luck with your story. I have one posted on red curtain that i am still writing and i just added a new chapter to it and it has taken me awhile to do. so i hope that everything goes good for u. ![[emoticon]](http://www.paperdemon.com/images/forum/mysmilies/star.gif)
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Posted: Mar 2, 2006 6:31 am
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Love story huh? then how about this
My love for you is like the sun rise and sunset
It rises when I wake and think of you
And sets in to my dream as I dream of my love for you
For me there are no rainny days
Just clear blur skies, just like my love for you.
what do you think short but sweet
Last edited by Neko-girl on Mar 2, 2006 6:32 am. Total edits: 1.
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