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whoa, never thought you could right something like that

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Hiya Mil. Your roast:

This is cool but usually song lyrics and poems are seperated out onto separate lines like so:

As I fall ever lower
into the pit of darkness
I look up and see you
thro the night...


its hard to read poetry right when its all running together.

also be sure to use spell check.

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