He does look great. I think if you maybe lowered his brow a little more and maybe narrowed his eyes a little bit more, you'd get the more ominous looking Anakin that you wanted. Otherwise, you did a very original style drawing and you should be very proud of how it turned out. Great work, hun.
He looks really cool actually. The yellow eyes do him justice, that's for sure. You should've drawn a hood to partially cover his face...he would look more...how can I put it..ominous? Anyways, good job.