Forgotten

Posted Mar 2, 2008, 7:48:59 PM UTC

The title probably makes absolutely no sense with just the picture. It's the name of the story that she's in, which I'm not going to babble about because it isn't really set yet.

I was trying to draw another character, and this one just seemed to appear on the character. Oddly fitting with her story, and it amused me, so I just gave in and drew her instead.

I don't know why she has pink and purple sneakers. She probably got them as a gag gift, decided to wear them anyway, and then got stuck with them. And it amused me ^^ And the scraggly stuff is supposed to be some sort of electricity.

Crits = <3

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ArkillianDragon
Mar 2, 2008, 3:45:03 PM UTC
Hmmm- there's something lifeless about her expression and pose- I'm not sure what she's meant to be expressing to give suggestions. Love her socks though ^^
Um yeah- tell me a bit more about her pose and I may be able to give you a red line crit. Also- how old is she? She seems 13 or so cause she doesn't have breasts/hips. Is this correct? The book's forearm is a little long too. the forearm should be around the length of the hand from palm to middle finger tip. Um yeah.. That sorta what you were wanting in crit? ^^; *cringes*
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- Altaike
  Mar 3, 2008, 11:47:21 AM UTC
  She's technically supposed to look mildly sardonic, but I fail at expressions and gave up with her. I think I need to just completely redo the right side (her right) of her face and her mouth.
  
  Her socks were fun XP I want socks like that.
  
  She's spinning slightly while landing from floating, I wasn't quite sure how to really portray that really well. (and probably failed again XD)
  
  13 is actually how old she is XD I usually can't get ages to look right so I'm glad it came out right this time! And shortening her forearm shouldn't be too hard, I can see what you mean so I'll fix that ^^
  
  *hugs* Thank you! And that's exactly what I wanted <3
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  ArkillianDragon
  Mar 3, 2008, 1:13:43 PM UTC
  Well, for the expression, you'd have simplify it down to either and agitated expression, a superior "I don't care about you" expression, or a "What ever" expression. Agitated would have narrowed eyes, towered brows and a neutral to frowned mouth, Superior looks like raised brows, relaxed eyes, and mouth (I think you were going for this look with an analysing feel with the raised brow- this makes her look curious more than analytical)- her head would also be tilted upwards. Lastly, the what ever expression has them with one raised one lowered brows, eyes looking away, and a slight frown. That may also be what you're trying for.
  
  It also comes down to posture. If she wants to look superiour, hands on the waist, or a dominant stance is good. If she doesn't want to care, her body should turn away. If she wants to kick you tush quickly cause she's ticked off, she'd have a battle stance.
  
  Those sort of things is what I mean by mundane- she... doesn't tell a story. A thought for future pics maybe? ^^;
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  Altaike
  Mar 4, 2008, 11:20:54 AM UTC
  Thanks! That'll make it a bit easier to change her expression around (and hopefully get it closer to right this time)! <3
  
  Sardonic tends to be more mockingly amused (yeah I definitely failed XD), but I can probably combine elements of those with a slight grin and get it close. Maybe. Or I'll just switch to trying for one of the three you mentioned, most likely one of the second two.
  
  I'll definitely think about that next time I draw something! ^^ It'll probably help the characters come across a lot more.
  
  Thanks! <3
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  ArkillianDragon
  Mar 4, 2008, 11:30:34 AM UTC
  Sometimes pulling the face helps. IT'll give you an idea if you're thinking what the character is. As WEIRD as it sounds, an engrossed artist pulls faces as they draw XD I know I do it. IT's why I don't like people watching me when I draw XD It helps me judge if others will like it though
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  Altaike
  Mar 8, 2008, 1:33:12 PM UTC
  I actually don't know if I do that... Though sometimes I'll randomly jump up and run to the mirror to do so. That's probably something I'll start doing now that you mention it though, if only because I'll be conscious of it. ^^
  
  I fixed her arm, attempted to fix her face XD Kinda failed in the latter; I kept trying different expressions and failing at them, so by the point I decided to give up for the day she was still rather expressionless. I'll probably keep altering it until I actually manage to get something. ^^
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  ArkillianDragon
  Mar 9, 2008, 1:29:02 AM UTC
  She has a more serious look on her face now atleast ^^ Which is personality. The forearms look about right now too
  
  Don't worry about the facial thing. Yuo don't know you're doing it. its unconscious. I only figured it out cause people ask me if I'm upset when I'm drawing- when I'm concentrating hard. I then read that you copy emotions you draw. It was then that I noticed my emotions change as I drew my pics. IT's really weird XD Its not something you can look for thoguh. Otherwise you'll be conscious of it >.>
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