Frankenpunk

Posted Jun 6, 2011, 10:52:46 PM

A green dude playing a standing bass!

 

Critique?

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  • Jun 7, 2011, 12:37:48 AM UTC
    I could give critique if I knew what you wanted feed back on?
    • Jun 7, 2011, 12:44:14 AM UTC
      Sure, I'd love that! and yes, I would like critiques on anything really, though anatomy specifically would be most beneficial Smile
      • Jun 7, 2011, 11:38:54 AM UTC
        Hmmm... Ok. It's not alot to go on but I'll try Sad

        I've attached a red line crit for this, but his chest is too low (unless he has breasts) for a humanoid shape. I mean, maybe you've intentionally done it this way for a reason, but the nipple line of the chest is about a head in distance below the chin. Yours has abotu a head and a third so it gives and odd shape to his vest. It's around about where the ribcage meets in the middle of the chest in hieght so I'm not sure if perhaps you were thinking ribcage there, and that the stretch marks were the bottom of his chest (which would be correct locations). If it's the case, the rib cage would curve down like in the crit rather than up. this may be a look you were wanting though. The picture has a funky balance to the shapes. The double bass and triangle balance each other out well! The bright colours are very punchy. The only other thing that I could suggest that needed some work was perhaps the design of the double bass. Instruments can be a challenge to draw. I'm not sure if you play this instrument, but it's easy to get some things off in instrument design if you don't play it or don't have a reference. The strings don't really have anything to connect to at the top and get tightened for tuning with, and the core of the double bass is hollow so that the sound can vibrate about and come out with that real thick feel about it. It needs some holes in it to do that. ITs something you can have some fun with. http://www.studentsoftheworld.info/sites/music/img/27606_doublebass.jpg This one has some fancy Fs in it called the 'f-hole' apparently (sounds like someone's trying not to say a swear word O.o ) for letting the amplified sound out. I'd imagine that a fantasy double bass could have lightning shaped ones or something cooler though.

        ... unless it's an electric guitar of some sorts- I don't think it is though.

        That's about it though. Any other points I'd give would be just nitty picky and too late to change but not important enough to know Smile I like the picture, and that's what counts ^^ I hope I was of a help to you Smile
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        • Jun 23, 2011, 10:48:57 PM UTC
          I thought the chest looks off, but couldn't put my thumb on it. Thank you for the visual, I absolutely LOVE that feature about this site! And thanks for the Bass tip! I do plan on drawing more of them, so I will keep that in mind.

          And I don't mind nit pickiness for future reference if you decide to help me later. Thank you so much, I hate to sound ingratiating, but this was sincerely helpful!
          • Jun 24, 2011, 12:37:22 AM UTC
            I love the feature too Smile PD has all sorts of cool features like that ^^ I'll see if I get time to give you more crits in the future. I'm pretty busy till the end of July with my comic but I'm always happy to help ^^