Zarbon and Bulma WIP

Posted May 14, 2006, 9:15:44 AM UTC
This is a work-in-progress for... well i guess you could call it a concept illustration for Surviving Together. I'm trying to get myself back into the project.

I need some help with this. I'm having a lot of trouble with Zarbon's arms. He's holding her but im not sure if it looks like he's actually holding her. The pose in the hands doesn't seem convincing to me. Also that right boot doesn't look convincing either.

If you know how to fix this, feel free to draw ontop of it and send the corrected one to me. please draw it in another color so i can see it.

All comments appreciated.

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  • May 21, 2006, 12:16:32 PM UTC
    I think his arm should be a bit more under her back then nare her neck apart fomr then it's cool
  • May 18, 2006, 3:27:00 PM UTC
    Gorgeous, I love Zarbon's expression. And this has to be the first ZarbonxBulma fanart I've ever seen! I'm really not much of an artist myself, so I'm afraid I can't help you. But really, it looks perfect to me! ^_^
    • May 18, 2006, 6:05:47 PM UTC
      thanks Starkiller. It's more like Zarbon is getting ready to claim her as a concubine. She doesn't really want to have anything to do with it. Then Vegeta stops him and claims Bulma for himself.
  • May 17, 2006, 7:26:30 PM UTC
    Im not good at pointing out whats wrong, except if it jump at my eyes, is his head a bit too big? Me, i think all drawings are ok and that there is no such thing as something wrong with a drawing. But also, i'm sure you already had all the help you needed so i'm just going to rant and rave.
    I love it. God, ever since i've read this fanfic and that i know your working on it...i've been dying to see more and more of your project. I wish i could help you with it. Cant wait to see the finish work. Love it Susie!!!!
  • May 14, 2006, 8:29:07 PM UTC
    ok...I am really liking how you want this to look. Yes you want some comments and critiques...alright..yes...the lover body seems a little off from the upper body...I am liking the upper body from how I am looking at it now...it is just you do kinda have him on a slant and he looks like he is tipping or something...ok maybe he is a little drunk?! lol no. I am loving the way Bulma is resting in his arms I am loving that...As Arkillian said he needs a little re shaping or the legs as in height and ...he needs to be straight other than those details it is looking awesome I can't wait to see more@ Smile
  • May 14, 2006, 4:36:18 AM UTC
    OK this is what I see. WHy it looks wrong. He is leaning to one side,which seems to be because of her weight. But her legs should not be the heavier side of her. With his arm positioned how it is, it seens she is slipping down. She should come up a little more on his arm. Or move his arm more under her.Also, he looks in motion in his uper body and his legs look stiff, Perhaps a slight bend to his knees would make him look like he is braceing her wait. Then again I'm sick and its 4:35 am.
    • May 14, 2006, 10:27:06 AM UTC
      thanks for the comments WildeKarde. I'll move her body up a little more to see if i can fix that balance problem. she does look like she's slipping.
  • May 14, 2006, 4:25:17 AM UTC
    It is true that Zarbon seems to be much taller compared to Bulma, but I suppose that the difference in size is due to the difference of age and to the fact that Zarbon is an alien.

    The left leg of Zarbon is slightly deviated but I do not see defects in the way he holds Bulma in his arms and their faces are well drawn.

    In conclusion, I would say that the only defect would be his left leg, besides that, the draft is realistic and well done.
    • May 14, 2006, 10:25:07 AM UTC
      thank you for the comments Okami. For the left leg do you mean his left or screen left (left from our perspective)?
      • May 14, 2006, 11:01:27 AM UTC
        you are welcome! I was talking about the left leg on the side of Bulma's head, his real left side.
  • May 14, 2006, 3:26:03 AM UTC
    The right leg is too short- that's the problem. Either that, or he is totally off balance. There's a bit of a size difference with Bulma and Zarb. Is this right?

    Um... His right elbow could be wider too. It seems a little small for a warrior of the DBZverse... Errr... If this is all crap, then I'm stilly drunk atthe moment ^^;
    • May 14, 2006, 10:23:53 AM UTC
      yeah the arms could be beefier. thanks for the comments.

      he's on a dutch angle by the way.
      • May 14, 2006, 5:19:17 PM UTC
        .... dutch angle? Never heard of that... ^^;

        *Has never taken art classes*
        • May 14, 2006, 7:03:26 PM UTC
          a dutch angle is when the camera is tilted a little bit so that the horizon line is on a slant.
          • May 14, 2006, 8:28:26 PM UTC
            OK- that makes sence. He isn't balanced. All of his weight is on his left foot cause his torso is completly above it. The right leg should either be tippe toed, or closer to the other foot. Either that, or you need to kick out his left leg more. That's how I see it Smile
            • May 14, 2006, 11:23:09 PM UTC
              he's balanced. his weight is evenly on both legs. but the horizon is slanted for drama. but i'll tip him more to one side and draw in a horizon line to make the dutch angle more noticable. trust me it will make more sense when you see the next revision
              • May 15, 2006, 2:32:53 AM UTC
                [imgfp374] I don't know if this is clear, but this is what I'm meaning- if you line up the angle on his head to his body, his right leg looks out. If I'm wrong, then do tell me why ^^;
                • May 15, 2006, 8:37:49 AM UTC
                  oh ok i see what you're saying! i want his back to be arched a little bit but perhaps i need to follow that line there that you just put down. i'll work with that. thank you Big Smile
                  • May 15, 2006, 3:18:32 PM UTC
                    Thanks Smile I didn't think I was going too crazy ^^; It was a bit difficult though, cause knowing how you know art, that may have actually been the pose- I just wanted to make sure that you understood my basis of the critique Smile I'm glad I could help ^^
                • May 15, 2006, 8:43:12 AM UTC
                  yeah looking at it again. the shoulders should probably match the same angle as the feet. you're right.

                  by the way, sorry the image folio thingy wasn't displaying properly before. there was a problem with my code. i fixed it.

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