Comment 66292

Comment ID 66292

[Art] Trouble Brewing...
ArkillianDragon
Feb 13, 2008, 3:52:26 PM UTC on [Art] Trouble Brewing...
Unless their feet are resting on ground, I don't think they're relaxed enough. Yeah- I agree also with the belly button and thigh thing also. Yes I suggest googling a ref pic ^^

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  • Yuriona
    Feb 18, 2008, 6:00:54 AM UTC
    Their feet will be resting on the floor if I ever figure out how to do a decent woodgrain brush. :/
    I'm not sure what you mean about the thighs but the belly button always gives me trouble. I did use reference pics but the correct placement still eludes me. Rawr...
    • ArkillianDragon
      Feb 18, 2008, 11:35:01 PM UTC
      Right, I needed to go home to do a red line for this and I hope you appreciate it - I'm kinda meant to be working on the comic at the moment ^^; Lol It's ok though- as long as it helps I'm cool with criting Smile

      Main things I see-
      *The waists tend to be a little too skinny. Even bishie men are a stockier form than women. It also flattens off alot when the arms are up. Men's chests are kinda weird that way.
      * The short haired guy's right leg is rested on the ledge more cause it's twisted away- that means his foot can't reach the ground. That'll throw you off cause you'd need to make the leg longer to compensate, which you did. I've given a very rough sketch of where I think it needs to be... Can you tell I'm bad at toes... thus the scribble XD Lol
      *That bottom ledge needs to be raised.
      *The thigh corrections are there. You got it nearly there. I can tell you used references though Smile It's mostly muscle tone stuff. They look like they should be a bit toned so I've taken that into consideration Yes
      *Still bugged with long haired guy's pose. I think its cause of his legs- they're not relaxed. I think the feet need to separate more to being below the knee. Give him a center of gravity
      * The heads are a bit big, but that's ok. it's all style in the end. It's if you're happy that's important with that kind of thing. I though I might point it out in case it was unintentional. It does make them younger looking which has a bishie flavour so its not a bad thing ^^

      The above stuff are like... nitty picky stuff. You've got the basics there, and the picture tells a story which is the big thing Smile I hope I've been a help ^^; I know throwing this much crit at you can be overwhelming, but I'm hoping that it can give you a better idea about why it may bug you a little. Art has a bunch of unwritten rules that I'm still learning. You can accent somethings, but some things need to remain constant.. I think I'm beign true to that with my crit ^^; Heh... Alright- I'll shut up now cause it's SERIOUSLY late and I've done no work on my comic yet *flees*
      Image attached
      • Yuriona
        Feb 25, 2008, 5:29:44 AM UTC
        Oh thank you! *glomps* I do appreciate it!!

        * yeah, I'm still working on the waist thing. I like how the short haired guy's torso turned out but I may thicken him up a bit.
        * I was going to try and make the seat they're on angled slightly but I may have to get the background done first then make adjustments accordingly. I hate backgrounds!
        * definitely toned. Embarrassed Heh heh... I have a lot of trouble with leg definition so any help is greatly appreciated.
        * Yeah, its partially intentional since the long haired one is almost never relaxed around his twin mostly because he never knows when the next 'attack' is coming. Still, I'll see what I can do with his feet since his pose bugs me a bit too.
        *Another issue I have but I think if I buff the bodies up a bit that might help. I am happy with the shorter haired one but the other needs work.

        You are awesome! Thank you! Worship I really do appreciate this even if I don't agree with all of it. Thank you so much!